I think the shot of the guy lighting up is brilliant, however I'd definitely have done it without the woman in the background - overall I get a negative feeling from her expression, which takes away from being able to see the image dispassionately...
The light on the face, against the overall drab dark surroundings, and the grimy feel of the location, works so, so well... I bet it's a great location, too... would love to do some glamour nudes against that backdrop...
Cheers,
Stuart